星を廻せ月より速く || Send Stars Round the Sky Faster than the Moon

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5 responses to “星を廻せ月より速く || Send Stars Round the Sky Faster than the Moon”

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   mozitre

   14 August 2022

   It’s great that now you are part of english lyric writing for the song!

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      Releska

      14 August 2022

      Thank you! Yes, it’s awesome and I had a lot of fun helping out. When I get around to updating this page I hope to add some more details…

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   空見りんき

   15 October 2016

   > 星を廻せ月より速く

   > Faster than the moon, which orbits a planet

   Your translation does not seem a word-for-word translation
   and I wonder how you interpreted the original phrase.

   I think the original (Japanese) phrase or title is curious
   and hard to interpret.
   Furthermore, the context would not do much help to interpret.

   I couldn’t make sense the phrase but I write what I thought below.
   You can skip the below if you don’t want to read;
   I would like to know how you interpreted and
   I’m glad if you reply and write about your interpretation anyway.

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   The word-for-word translation would be:
   : Revolve the stars faster than the moon.

   I translate 「星」 as stars.
   The 「星」 can mean either “earth”, “planet” or “star”.
   I choose “star” because another 「星」 in the phrase 「星を見ている」
   in this song should be translated as “star” too, and
   because of the Renko’s ability.

   Renko has the ability to read time from the stars and read
   her location from the moon, but not to revolve or control the stars.

   If 「星を廻せ」 should be interpreted literally,
   that might mean Renko has the ability to control the stars in this dream.
   From the context, the paragraph seems to describe things when in dream.
   (But what for she revolves stars?)

   If 「星を廻せ」 should be a metaphor,
   that might mean to put time foward
   as the stars’ revolution means time passes.
   Oh now has Renko got the ability to manipulate time in this dream?
   She might put time forward
   for 「未知の先へ、さぁ今を抜け出して」
   until 「奇跡と出会えるまで」
   like 「”遠く遠く”誰より遠くまで」.

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      releska

      16 October 2016

      Hello again! 🙂
      I agree that this title is very hard to interpret. It’s been over a year since I translated this, but if I remember correctly, I think I interpreted it in the following way:

      -I treated 月 as the main part of the sentence. So, I split it up into two: 星を廻せ月 and 月より速く, which became ‘the moon, which orbits a planet’ and ‘faster than the moon’ respectively.
      [Looking back on it now, I realise that the correct way of reading it is 星を廻せ、月より速く, but I thought it was 星を廻せ（る）月より速く]

      -星を廻せ: I think in this case, I misinterpreted 廻せ, which is linked to the misunderstanding I had above. I interpreted it as 廻る instead, which has a completely different meaning.

      In other words, it wasn’t a word-for-word translation because I didn’t interpret the verbs correctly >_>

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      Having cleared up that misunderstanding, a question still remains: what does the title actually mean? I like your interpretation – that Renko can control time in her dream. It fits in with the song, but it makes me wonder why she doesn’t want to move the moon as well, since the moon is a more obvious signal of the passing of time.

      I just had a thought: Renko remembers stargazing with Merry in the phrase 「星を見ている」, so maybe rather than manipulating time, she wants to send the stars somewhere else because they remind her of Merry? Maybe ”遠く遠く”誰より遠くまで is where she wants to send the stars to, because as long as the stars aren’t there, Renko doesn’t notice that she’s actually alone, and Merry isn’t with her.

      Overall, I think I would translate this song completely differently if I went back and translated it today >_< Even so, as always, thank you for your insight! I enjoyed hearing your interpretation of the song.

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         空見りんき

         16 October 2016

         Thank you for reply.

         > I like your interpretation – that Renko can control time in her dream.
         > It fits in with the song, but it makes me wonder
         > why she doesn’t want to move the moon as well,
         > since the moon is a more obvious signal of the passing of time.

         I agree with your wonder. I think my interpretation is rather strained.

         In my strained interpretation,
         she doesn’t move the moon as well because
         the stars are time and the moon is space for her.
         I got the idea from Renko’s ability;
         If her ability was developed to control the stars and the moon,
         she could manipulate time by controlling the stars and
         could manipulate space by controlling the moon.

         > I just had a thought:
         > Renko remembers stargazing with Merry in the phrase 「星を見ている」,
         > so maybe rather than manipulating time, she wants to send the stars somewhere else
         > because they remind her of Merry?
         > Maybe ”遠く遠く”誰より遠くまで is where she wants to send the stars to,
         > because as long as the stars aren’t there, Renko doesn’t notice
         > that she’s actually alone, and Merry isn’t with her.

         That’s an interesting thought.

         I cannot figure out how to connect 「星を廻せ月より速く」
         to the successive phrase 「”遠く遠く”誰より遠くまで」 literally,
         but you did.
         「”遠く遠く”誰より遠くまで」 means “physically far” in prime meaning.
         My interpretation is also metaphoric in this point
         and make it more strained one.

         A concern in your thought could be that
         if the stars literally do 「廻る」, they will turn around and come up again
         not going far way.
         I think this concern can be solved depending on how you interpret 「廻る」.

         > Overall, I think I would translate this song completely differently
         > if I went back and translated it today >_<

         I'm looking forward to seeing your new translation someday!

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