Petals

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10 responses to “Petals”

1. 

   ixsetf

   27 August 2019

   弱く閉じた瞼　世界はきっと知らない
   yowaku tojita mabuta sekai wa kitto shiranai
   I weakly closed my eyes. I surely don’t know about the world.
   I believe this line would be better translated as “The world surely doesn’t know of your weakly closed eyes”, the original would be correct if 世界は was replaced with 世界を.

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      releska

      31 August 2019

      Thank you for your comment! I can see your point of view, but I think there’s part of the line that we’re missing. I did a cursory Google search to see how this phrase is used, and I came up with two examples:

      -“五百年後の世界は、きっと知らないことで溢れているだろう”
      -“セカイはきっと知らないパワーで輝いてる”

      In both cases, は is used to indicate that what comes afterwards is actually something that’s describing 世界. I perhaps went a bit loose by translating it as “I surely don’t know about the world”, but my understanding is that we’re meant to ‘fill in’ the phrase with something like the first example.

      I would also question what “The world surely doesn’t know of your weakly closed eyes” actually means. In a song in which the speaker is hesitant, pursuing something which they struggle to reach, it’s consistent for them to know nothing about the world. I think it feels a little strange to suddenly change the focus to the ‘world’.

      Please let me know your thoughts on this!

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         ixsetf

         2 September 2019

         So 知らない has multiple possible meanings, and it seems we are assuming different ones. 知らない can be used as an I-adjective as in those example sentences, in which case it would mean “unknown; strange” (知らないこと as “unknown thing”, or 知らないパワー as “unknown power”).

         Alternatively, 知らない could be the negative form of 知る (“to know”) as in:

         彼女は泳ぎ方を知らない。
         She doesn’t know how to swim.

         in this case 彼女は indicates that “she” is the person who doesn’t know how to swim. If 泳ぎ方を was omitted, it would be inferred from context what she doesn’t know.

         I believe 世界はきっと知らない follows this form, and we are supposed to infer that the thing that isn’t known by the world is (the demon girl’s)弱く閉じた瞼.

         So that is why I landed on “The world surely doesn’t know of your weakly closed eyes”.

         If the meaning of this is unclear I’ll try to elaborate on how I think it fits in the story. My reading is that the speaker has defeated the demon girl, and the demon girl has closed her eyes in death. The speaker is now observing that the rest of the world surely wouldn’t know this side of her (the weakly closed eyes), as they would only have seen the damage she caused to the country.

         This also works better with the following line in my opinion:

         その明日の轍に　散っていく闇夜の欠片
         Fragments of the night fall among the furrows of tomorrow.

         In this context the speaker would be comparing her to the “fragments of the night”, which imo is a very powerful metaphor.

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            releska

            3 September 2019

            Thanks for your response! I was kind of testing out the other theory to see how strong it is, but based on what you’ve written I’m happy to make the alteration you suggested! (^_^) Thanks!

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2. 

   YukiRyuu

   9 January 2018

   I didnt expect it
   Why Nanahira sing a sad song ;-;

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   cocoa

   7 March 2017

   Thank you so much!

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      releska

      7 March 2017

      You’re welcome! (^_^)

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4. 

   castertekcore

   7 February 2017

   Thank you very much for the translation. I own this album and the story and illustration behind this song just makes it more powerful and beautiful. Here is an image on the full illustration http://i.imgur.com/FKw33M9.jpg

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5. 

   Meriole

   4 February 2017

   Thanks you really much Releska. Normally, I don’t ask translation of Denpa songs, but when I see CamelliaXNanahira, I can’t resist. So, I think your the first to have translate a song of Confetto.

   The context of the song is difficult to explain, but there’s actually a picture in the booklet to illustrate the song. Even so, we can have a look to this picutre, in the official site.

   Here, my interpretation for the song:

   The song turns about the sad fate between a girl demon and a young boy, who this one has killed her.

   According the Japenese, the song is in the point of view of the boy, who have for mission to kill the demon girl, to the risk of his life (all the wound in her body). It sounds like the hero who is killing the king demon, something like that.

   The demon girl in the picture has her eyes closing and the petal who are falling, means she is actually been defeated.

   “Your feeble warmth, which I lost,
   Turns the stagnated sky into the colour I wanted it to be.” = if you take a look to the picture, in the window can be see the light which is dominating, means the darkness has been defeated.

   The only reason that the song is sad is probably, because the two characters have a connected fate and seems to revive the sad destiny. So, probably, in force to repeat the same scene, a connection has been etablished between these two characters, and probably a little love.

   We can even see the hesitation of the boy, who don’t want to kill her, and maybe in other parallel worlds/fates, this one let him defeated by the demon girl.

   But, it’s a wonderful song, I really love it.

   Thanks you Releska for this (sorry to have been so long to answer)! You make my day :).

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      releska

      5 February 2017

      You’re welcome! 😀
      I enjoyed reading your interpretation of the song, too 🙂 I feel like I have a deeper understanding of it now

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